2014년 10월 26일 일요일

Week 11 - Self evaluation

SELF EVALUATION

1. Score that I deserve.

 - I think 1point is appropriate for me. Because I think my article needs some correction and needs to be arranged. Logical writing is needed (I think)



2. Decide what I did well, and What could I do better.

 - I think I prepared enough evidence that can prove my argument. I found experiments and studies done by experts and scientists that can confirm my opinion.

 - Although I found proper refutation opinion, but my defend was week. I have to develop logical and right defend.



3. Which part of my classical argument was the best?

 - I think the best part of my classical argument is the confirmation part. Because the confirmation part is to reveal the relationship between human and the classical music. And it was quite simple and had abundant findings that can confirm my opinion.



4. My strategy for my next draft.

 - I have to arrange my article logically and I have to develop the element of the refutation part. And I should read and read again to find the part that needs to be reinforced. After that, I will add some information and statistics to reinforce my argument. I will focus on statying in topics and reinforcing my opinion and checking the points that is not logical.

First draft

 Classical music has positive influence on human
 
Have you ever heard about the 'Crossover'? There is one of the genre called 'Crossover'. It is the genre that classical music and the other genre are combined. For example, 'Bolling suite for flute and jazz piano trio' for the classical music and jazz, 'Concerto For Group & Orchestra' for classical music and rock. Through this genre, you can find that classical music is quite influential to music. Although it had been composed a long time ago, it is still powerful to music and to human and human brain as well. But the effect of the classical music is still discussed. There are people who argue that classical music doesn't affect the human. Although someone's disagreement, it seems like apparently fact that the classical music has an effect on human.
 
Actually, many people will know about the Mozart effect. There are many studies done before about the Mozart effect. 'Mozart effect' is the finding of the UCI's researchers and Frances Rauscher and it means that listening to Mozart's music can enhance the ability of studying and intelligence. Therefore there was a lot of parents who played the Mozart's music to thier children and some of the counries try to support the Classical music industry to increase the people's intelligence. After the appreance of the concept of the Mozart effect, many people studied and worked about this a lot of times, and there are many reasons that can support this hypothesis.

 Not only the Mozart effect, there are still numerous evidence that can prove the positive effect of the classical music. According to Silvia Francesca Magiloce, Classical music has influence on organization adn abilities of the brain through its melody and rhythm. Repeated melody is related to the organization of the brain. And the regular rtythm of the classical music has an impact on abilties. This study can prove the Mozart effect apparently. Also there is interesting findings of the same person. Researcher found that effect of the classical music is much powerful than on children. This finding can solve the wonder of why parents try to play the classical music to their children rather than listening to it.
 Actually, there was experiment to show the difference of listening to the classical music and not listening to the classiclal music. This experiment done by scientists, revealed that rats which listened to classical music jave physically more developed brain. By this experiment, it seems that the fact that classical music has positive influence on human becomes more obvious than before. But the classical music not only has an effect physically, but also
emotionally. Classical music make people calm and at the same time, it can make people feel joyous. According to one study done by UCI, when people listening to the classical music, brain produces the hormone called serotonin that makes people feel joyous.
 
Although I already said about it, the best example of showing effect of the classical music will be the 'Mozart's effect.' It will be much helpful to understand what kind of effect does classical music gives if you read about the Mozart effect. http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1281386/

 Also, there are so many veiled effect of the classical music. Accrding to Claudia Frederick, Classical music can affect physically. For example, when people listen to the classical  music,  it can lower the blood pressure and also this can help to cure the symptom of insomnia. Moreover, it can change the brain wave positively, and even babies grow faster.
 Surprisingly, I also can have an effect emotionally. Classical music cna help reduce pain and anxiety and some cities use classical music as means to reduce the crime. It means that classical music can help control the emotion of people. Also, it can heighten and arouse emtions.These results of studies and experiments make we realize the effect of classical music. And we can know the fact that classical music does have power to alter some activity of our body and emotion.
 
 Although the study about Mozart effect and the effect of the classical music is widely done, there are opponents who disagree with the effect of the classical music. Especailly toward the Mozart's effect, some ciritics such as Dr. Daniel Levitin suggest the case of Williams Syndrome. Originally Mozart's effect argues that there is link or connection between the classical music and high intelligence. But according to Dr. Daniel Levitin, it is not. People with the Williams Syndrome has quite low intelligence but they are frequently musically gifted. He suggested one patient of him, Levitin, he even can't open the case of clarinet, but if someone offers it, he can play it remarkably well.

 This arguement can refute the effect of the classical music. But I want to insist that there is always exception and classical music's effect is not only limited to intelligence. As I already wrote, there are so many other effect of classical music.

Also there are some opinions that effect of the music depends on the personal taste. Personal taste can be variant but generally classical music has effect on human like calming.
 
Many people like to listening to music. But it is hard to find people who like listening to the classical music. As as one of the listeners of classical music, I truly desire to explain and spread the effect of the classical music. Listening to the classical music does help you in various way. It has an positive effect in many way. It can help you physically and emotionally. Even some cities use the classical music to reduce the incidence of crime. This can show us the importance of classical  music and its effect. And this is the reason why I want to share the effect and merit of the classical music with other people. There are numerous advantages.
However, there are some opponents toward the Mozart effect and effect of the classical music. But rather than the shortcomings, there are many positive effects that classical music provides. It helps your brain working well, also helps feel joyous. Therefore, classical music has positive impact on human.
 
 
 
 
 
 


 
 
 

The conclusion

My conclusion

 Many people like to listening to music. But it is hard to find people who like listening to the classical music. As as one of the listeners of classical music, I truly desire to explain and spread the effect of the classical music. Listening to the classical music does help you in various way. It has an positive effect in many way. It can help you physically and emotionally. Even some cities use the classical music to reduce the incidence of crime. This can show us the importance of classical  music and its effect. And this is the reason why I want to share the effect and merit of the classical music with other people. There are numerous advantages.
However, there are some opponents toward the Mozart effect and effect of the classical music. But rather than the shortcomings, there are many positive effects that classical music provides. It helps your brain working well, also helps feel joyous. Therefore, classical music has positive impact on human.

The refutation and concession

1. What is my thesis?
Classical music has positive effect on human.



2. What is the opposite position?
There are another disease or phenomenon that can refute this.



3. What arguments can I anticipate?
 Williams Syndrome.
 Personal taste.



4. How will I counter those arguments?
Williams Syndrome is not general case and rather than Williams Syndrome, Mozart effect is much general.
We don't have to be regulated to Mozart's music.



My Refutation and concession

 Although the study about Mozart effect and the effect of the classical music is widely done, there are opponents who disagree with the effect of the classical music. Especailly toward the Mozart's effect, some ciritics such as Dr. Daniel Levitin suggest the case of Williams Syndrome. Originally Mozart's effect argues that there is link or connection between the classical music and high intelligence. But according to Dr. Daniel Levitin, it is not. People with the Williams Syndrome has quite low intelligence but they are frequently musically gifted. He suggested one patient of him, Levitin, he even can't open the case of clarinet, but if someone offers it, he can play it remarkably well.

 This arguement can refute the effect of the classical music. But I want to insist that there is always exception and classical music's effect is not only limited to intelligence. As I already wrote, there are so many other effect of classical music.

Also there are some opinions that effect of the music depends on the personal taste. Personal taste can be variant but generally classical music has effect on human like calming.

The confirmation

1. What is my thesis?
Classical music has positive influence on human.



2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis? 
I an using the experiments and studies done by experts.



 3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?
My arguments are usually based on the evidence such as experiments and studies and powerful hypothesis proposed by scientists, experts.


My Confirmation

 Although I already said about it, the best example of showing effect of the classical music will be the 'Mozart's effect.' It will be much helpful to understand what kind of effect does classical music gives if you read about the Mozart effect. http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1281386/

 Also, there are so many veiled effect of the classical music. Accrding to Claudia Frederick, Classical music can affect physically. For example, when people listen to the classical  music,  it can lower the blood pressure and also this can help to cure the symptom of insomnia. Moreover, it can change the brain wave positively, and even babies grow faster.
 Surprisingly, I also can have an effect emotionally. Classical music cna help reduce pain and anxiety and some cities use classical music as means to reduce the crime. It means that classical music can help control the emotion of people. Also, it can heighten and arouse emtions.These results of studies and experiments make we realize the effect of classical music. And we can know the fact that classical music does have power to alter some activity of our body and emotion.

The narration

 My persuasive argument thesis is: Classical music has positive influence on human


1. What do people already know about my topic?
 
Classical music, especially music of Mozart, is well known as one of the mechanism that increases the intelligence. Classical music makes people calm. Classical music has specific form. It is still famous and powerful for example, there are a lot of orchestras that perform the classical music and there is even genre that combined other genre and classical music.

 
 
2. What research has already been done about my topic?
 
3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)
 
Classical music obviously has an impact on human. And the effect of the classical music is positive. Although some of the pop or rock music is revealed to disturb the other action or activity, classical music not disturb but help concentrating.


My Narration

 Actually, many people will know about the Mozart effect. There are many studies done before about the Mozart effect. 'Mozart effect' is the finding of the UCI's researchers and Frances Rauscher and it means that listening to Mozart's music can enhance the ability of studying and intelligence. Therefore there was a lot of parents who played the Mozart's music to thier children and some of the counries try to support the Classical music industry to increase the people's intelligence. After the appreance of the concept of the Mozart effect, many people studied and worked about this a lot of times, and there are many reasons that can support this hypothesis.

 Not only the Mozart effect, there are still numerous evidence that can prove the positive effect of the classical music. According to Silvia Francesca Magiloce, Classical music has influence on organization adn abilities of the brain through its melody and rhythm. Repeated melody is related to the organization of the brain. And the regular rtythm of the classical music has an impact on abilties. This study can prove the Mozart effect apparently. Also there is interesting findings of the same person. Researcher found that effect of the classical music is much powerful than on children. This finding can solve the wonder of why parents try to play the classical music to their children rather than listening to it.

 Actually, there was experiment to show the difference of listening to the classical music and not listening to the classiclal music. This experiment done by scientists, revealed that rats which listened to classical music jave physically more developed brain. By this experiment, it seems that the fact that classical music has positive influence on human becomes more obvious than before. But the classical music not only has an effect physically, but also
emotionally. Classical music make people calm and at the same time, it can make people feel joyous. According to one study done by UCI, when people listening to the classical music, brain produces the hormone called serotonin that makes people feel joyous.


 
 

2014년 10월 25일 토요일

The Introduction

Classical music has an influence on human and human brain.


My Introduction

 Have you ever heard about the 'Crossover'? There is one of the genre called 'Crossover'. It is the genre that classical music and the other genre are combined. For example, 'Bolling suite for flute and jazz piano trio' for the classical music and jazz, 'Concerto For Group & Orchestra' for classical music and rock. Through this genre, you can find that classical music is quite influential to music. Although it had been composed a long time ago, it is still powerful to music and to human and human brain as well. But the effect of the classical music is still discussed. There are people who argue that classical music doesn't affect the human. Although someone's disagreement, it seems like apparently fact that the classical music has an effect on human.